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LarsC · Joined: 20 Feb 2004 Posts: 5

does this make sense?I have some unique features to offer, the other competitors do not have, e.g. "Guaranteed minumum income". The enclosed information on the Real Estate Investros products will explain in detail. Included as an addition benefit will be a 2% money back on...

tocarram · Joined: 04 May 2006 Posts: 4

Nope. And it has a ton of spelling errors.

Tazman · Joined: 30 Sep 2004 Posts: 4

you spelled minimum wrong. it's an "i" not a "u".I have some unique features to offer, the other competitors do not have.you could put something like: I have some unique features to offer which the other competitors do not have.and you spelled Investors wrong. it's Investors."Included as an addition benefit will be a 2% money back on"this one i don't know.

BenV · Joined: 23 Feb 2007 Posts: 4

Please let me rewrite the whole paragraph and then decide for yourself if you like it or not, okay?Let's see..."Unlike other competitors, I offer some unique features such as a Guaranteed Minimum Income. The enclosed information on the Real Estate Investors explains everything in detail. Included as an additional benefit is a 2% deduction (or refund/rebate) on..."Hope my reply answers your query to your satisfaction?Please let me know as soon as you can!Take it easy buddy!

Titimo · Joined: 22 Jan 2005 Posts: 3

I have some unique features to offer which the other competitors do not have, such as 'guaranteed minimum income'. The enclosed information sheet on the Real Investors Products explains the features in detail. Included as an additional benefit will be a 2 % money back on....Notes:1. You can use 'that' instead of 'which' in the first line. 2. The last sentence is incomplete.

yars232c · Joined: 22 Jun 2007 Posts: 5

I have some unique features to offer which other competitors do not have, e.g. "Guaranteed minimum income." The enclosed information on the Real Estate Investors products will explain in detail. Included as an addition benefit is a 2% money back on...