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Here is Chapter Two of my Story. It's not finished, but, wha

 
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phildeese



Joined: 30 May 2005
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 05, 2006 2:37 am    Post subject: Here is Chapter Two of my Story. It's not finished, but, wha Reply with quote
Here is Chapter Two of my Story. It's not finished, but, what do you think so far?
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gogo7



Joined: 26 Oct 2004
Posts: 7
PostPosted: Fri Sep 08, 2006 5:59 am    Post subject: Here is Chapter Two of my Story. It's not finished, but, wha Reply with quote
You do have talent. Your narrator sounds like a teenager would. Your sentences flow naturally. Just check your orthography and grammar. I wish you good luck.
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